Life Plus Twenty

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By Frank Atanacio


Sanity starved,

an infant beaten,

a woman carved,

your eyes red,

because a cop you worked with

and called a friend was dead,

shot twice in the head,

it was almost like insanity teasing,

and the court verdict

was anything but pleasing,

this man was brutal and unforgiving,

at a sentence hearing

he was just staring,

right at the judge, glaring,

but it was the last time,

he’d be cuffed and sneering,

because he was doing life plus twenty,

parole no less than twenty-five,

he’d never make it out alive,

but life plus twenty was a courtroom victory,

It was a courtroom fight,

that didn’t seem right,

that hollow victory was gloom,

and seemed sufficient for as long as it

stayed in the courtroom,

in the end it was simply not enough,

several surviving victims lost in a fog,

and one little boy who had

his eyes poked out,

was learning to handle his guide dog,

and a courtroom victory would still shout.

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Eiddwen 4 months ago

Brilliant and has to be awarded that up up and away.

Thank you for sharing this gem Frank and here's to many more to share on here.

Take care;

Eddy.

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

thanks for reading my life plue twenty Eddy.. bless you Frank

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Just Ask Susan Level 8 Commenter 4 months ago

Frank, Sometimes I think you take my comments the wrong way. I do enjoy reading what you write and think you are a brilliant writer. If I didn't I would not comment at all. With that said :)....I think this guy should have had the book thrown at him. With no chance whatever for parole. Just locked away somewhere deep and dark. Great write!

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

Susan I have nothing but love for you.. I joke cuz I know you have a great sense of humor....so I feed into that.. bless you :) Frank

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Just Ask Susan Level 8 Commenter 4 months ago

Frank, Okay so I guess we're good then :) Have a wonderful day!

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justateacher Level 7 Commenter 4 months ago

Frank - another wonderful poem that makes you feel as if you are in the middle of the action.

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calico Stark Level 4 Commenter 4 months ago

This poem was very alive! It creates a swirling of intense emotion that keeps one hooked. Voted up and awesome!

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

Susan were we ever bad? LOL Justateacher good to see you again thanks for visiting my life plus twenty and Calico Stark welcome and thanks for leaving your footprints on my page :) Frank

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thelyricwriter Level 8 Commenter 4 months ago

Frank, voted up, awesome, and interesting. Frank, you are very creative and your thinking process is genious. You have dipicted this life, this feeling very good my friend. Another class "A" poem.

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raciniwa 4 months ago

you always keep me on the edge, while reading your grim stories Frank...stories that make my stomach churn yet can't hide the admiration i have for you and your chosen genre...

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Sky9106 Level 8 Commenter 4 months ago

He He he . this is exactly the opposite way to be with those kinds of incidences , but it's my way of saying that Frank from DA Block has scored a great hit with this one. It's your best flow to date that can be placed anywhere , in a song a book or even a play , maybe you should check it again. "ANSWER TOMORROW" brethren Frank.

My vote, great work.

Bless.

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

Thanks thelyricwriter for that amazing comment.. and Raci.. you are the one to be admired.. and My friend Sky you're always on top of the game :) thank you guys for the wonderful comments :) Bless

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Alastar Packer Level 8 Commenter 4 months ago

Powerful poem here Frank. That's right about not making it out alive for the monster; killers and mutilators like him aren't generally looked on too favorably by their prison associates. No justice is justice enough for the victims loved ones sometimes.You must of felt this one very deeply cause it sure is an emotional poem.

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

thanks Alastar and you're right on all counts :)

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Vinaya Ghimire Level 8 Commenter 4 months ago

If Agatha Cristie is to write poems, this is it.

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AudreyHowitt Level 7 Commenter 4 months ago

What a great write Frank--but it made me remember---when I was in law school, I worked part-time my first year for an amicus board reviewing criminal appeals--After a while I couldn't do it anymore without wanting to throw up--the last one I read--was from an inmate father to tied his daughter up by her hair and beat her to death--it took three days for her to die--maybe this is too much reality for this forum--but there it is anyway

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

VG thanks so much for reading my Life Plus Twenty and the compliment.. and Audrey so many cases go to court and the outcome is good for courts standards.. but we the tax payers must clothes and feed the crimnals for life while the victims fight to get their lives back on track.. thanks for reading Audrey

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writer20 Level 8 Commenter 4 months ago

Another great one Frank. Voted up and awesome my friend.

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

Writer20 it's always good to see you :) Frank

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poetvix Level 7 Commenter 4 months ago

I love your crime related poetry. Today's point is so vivid. Justice is never really that, it's just all society can do. Nothing can ever replace what had been taken, the pain caused, the damage done. Bravo.

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

thank you you Poetic-Vix you :) LOL thanks for reading my life plus twenty

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Sueswan Level 8 Commenter 4 months ago

Hi Frank

"and one little boy who had

his eyes poked out,

was learning to handle his guide dog,

and a courtroom victory would still shout"

I gasped when I read these words.

Voted up and awesome.

Have a good weekend.

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

Thank you for reading Sueswan :) Frank

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Rosemay50 Level 8 Commenter 4 months ago

A very emotional poem Frank. Doesn't it twist you up when even if he had received the death penalty that little boy also has a lifetime sentense. A victory for the court and case closed.

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

I agree with you Rosemary50 thanks for reading my life plus twenty

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phdast7 Level 8 Commenter 4 months ago

I know we must have a legal system and that the courts are preferable to uncontrolled vigilante justice...we know that...but sometimes just sometimes we want what we "feel" would be justice. Then as your poem so eloquently makes clear, "good court justice" does not seem right at all. Avery good read. Thank you.

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

Thanks PHDast7 for your comment.. I think it's the money that stales our justice system.. the law needs prisoners.. the police needs crime,, and the lawyers need cases.. without any of that no money would be made...:) Frank

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Express10 Level 6 Commenter 4 months ago

I enjoyed the hub and agree wholeheartedly with phdast7. I note that the criminal sneered like the majority of prisoners who don't have any remorse.

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 4 months ago

Express10 thanks so much for sharing my life plus twenty :)

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Denise Handlon Level 8 Commenter 3 months ago

Ditto Eddy's words: 'Brilliant' You held my attention to the end and what an ending! You weave a wicked tale with your poetry, Frank. Thanks for sharing your exquisite talent here! Voted up and awesome!

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 3 months ago

Denise thanks so much for sharing your comments

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Deborah Brooks 3 months ago

wow Frank I felt like I was there watching.. You are so great at this. poor little boy no eyes. I wanted to cry.

Awesome as usual..

Debbie

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Frank Atanacio Hub Author 2 months ago

thanks so much Ms Brooks for reading my life plus twenty

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